这篇英语自我介绍有没有什么地方错了或者口语有错误又或者能改的更好啊！明天就要去私立校面试了！急急急急

通篇介绍很流畅，只是有些地方语法不对，需要修正。Hello，teachers My name is Zhang JieMing，My English name is Banjamin. I’m twelve years old. I’m in TongPang Primary school.I ’m the monitor of my class. I get on well with my classmates，I’m very outgoing，so I get on well with my classmates. （这句重复了，建议删除。）Besides，I’m very humorous too，my jokes often make my friends laugh.I have a lot of hobbies，such as play guitar（这里要用动名词形式，所以要改成 playing guitar），paly go (这是什么意思？) and listen music（除了改成动名词，listen后面要加 to，所以应该改成 listening to music). watch animation is my hobby too （改成" Watching cartoons is also one of my hobbies.）That's all (建议改成 That's all for my presentation. 意即：我的演说到此为止。） Thanks for listening。